tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2153888337668314458.post1805285087698294168..comments2024-03-05T14:03:08.208-06:00Comments on Bite and Smile with Joe Janes: Week 44, Day 303 - "Abortion Lover"Joe Janeshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05858974237565248026noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2153888337668314458.post-42020615301886282902009-11-18T14:06:32.532-06:002009-11-18T14:06:32.532-06:00Thanks.
Honestly I think you have much better sk...Thanks. <br /><br />Honestly I think you have much better sketches than this one among the 300 some, and the nice thing about writing one every day is that you have plenty of content to draw from all the time instead of putting all your eggs in the same one or two sketch baskets.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2153888337668314458.post-19541858173515803622009-11-18T13:48:15.724-06:002009-11-18T13:48:15.724-06:00"Plan B." Nice.
This is a scene where t..."Plan B." Nice.<br /><br />This is a scene where the title came first and after writing it, I realize, no longer fits. <br /><br />The ending is definitely a typical sketch comedy ending. Looking for something better, for sure.Joe Janeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05858974237565248026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2153888337668314458.post-44919990488237834012009-11-18T12:48:40.967-06:002009-11-18T12:48:40.967-06:00Yeah, agreed, but more funny I think is the fact h...Yeah, agreed, but more funny I think is the fact he's just trying to give her the money, just in case, as like an assurance, and there doesn't really need to be a follow-up scene. What if she takes the money and all along has one of those female condom things on anyway, sort of like a one night stand semi amateur prostitute thing going on? The dick being cut off at the end isn't original enough, nor is the pulling out compromise. Just my opinion. <br /><br />Oh, by calling this sketch "abortion lover" it also kills the surprising part with the $500 and what it's for. Maybe call the sketch "Plan B" which is ironically the brand name of the morning after pill?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2153888337668314458.post-24525468316864721432009-11-18T10:18:55.121-06:002009-11-18T10:18:55.121-06:00I want to see you make the trip to the clinic in a...I want to see you make the trip to the clinic in another scene. That could be interesting . . .Chris Othichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17749643560107203860noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2153888337668314458.post-81972214312876839822009-11-18T00:36:18.936-06:002009-11-18T00:36:18.936-06:00Nice... I think the funniest part is when he pull...Nice... I think the funniest part is when he pulls out the $500 and says what it's for. Not sure I like the last four or five lines as much as the rest of the sketch. It would be better if they don't go into the bedroom. <br /><br />After Al says, "I think we could have had some fun," it seems more natural if Emma just says "Maybe." I doubt she'd go into the being all torn up inside, no pun intended route. That's a writer speaking, not a character.Alisahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15771211110798216620noreply@blogger.com