tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2153888337668314458.post3523071192800699522..comments2024-03-05T14:03:08.208-06:00Comments on Bite and Smile with Joe Janes: Week 46, Day 317 - "Racist In A Box"Joe Janeshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05858974237565248026noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2153888337668314458.post-60107566731183744092009-12-03T16:34:38.317-06:002009-12-03T16:34:38.317-06:00Just trying to help. I think it was Enya in the o...Just trying to help. I think it was Enya in the other room.<br /><br />Maybe in a rewrite, you could get rid of the whole "stuck door" business and find an out that comes organically from the scene.<br /><br />Obviously I'm bored so I'm rewriting your stuff for you today.Chris Othichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17749643560107203860noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2153888337668314458.post-65061711275138669722009-12-03T10:15:42.270-06:002009-12-03T10:15:42.270-06:00Thanks for coming up with a worse out than my othe...Thanks for coming up with a worse out than my other two. Makes me feel better.Joe Janeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05858974237565248026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2153888337668314458.post-83214889067750348642009-12-03T09:53:21.993-06:002009-12-03T09:53:21.993-06:00Not sure if I love either of these endings.
Maybe...Not sure if I love either of these endings.<br /><br />Maybe you could do a wierd ending where they look in the room "off stage" and you get something like, "What's in there?" "It's worse than racism." Blackout.<br /><br />I don't usually like those "fuck you audience" moments but I guess if you're not wild about your current out it's something to try?Chris Othichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17749643560107203860noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2153888337668314458.post-1503928967401132842009-12-02T07:42:49.362-06:002009-12-02T07:42:49.362-06:00I think this is a bad ending for the scene. I don&...I think this is a bad ending for the scene. I don't know what the hell I was thinking. It suddenly became psycho. Here's the new out...<br /><br />ELLE<br />There you go. And we can take everything in that box and burn it in the back yard. Or on the front lawn with a crucifix, whichever you think is more appropriate.<br /><br />(Oliver throws all the KKK stuff back into the box.) <br /><br />OLIVER<br />I always felt pretty lucky to have my parents. In spite of that box, they were very loving and normal. (He looks at that stuck door.) Oh, I know what’s behind that door. That was my mother’s sewing room.<br /><br />(He tries the door again. Elle helps. The door opens. They step just inside the doorway. Mouths agape. Elle takes something thin, booklet-like off a shelf. Oliver presses a button.)<br /><br />ELLE<br />Your mom collected porn. A lot of it.<br /><br />(Oliver has pressed a button on a small TV. We hear porn music.)<br /><br />OLIVER<br />Not just collected.<br />(Blackout.)Joe Janeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05858974237565248026noreply@blogger.com