Written by Joe Janes
January 19, 2009
1 of 365 Sketches Project
CAST:
BOB CRANSTON – mid-30’s
MR. WILLIAMS – mid-50’s
(Lights up on Bob Cranston in his office cubicle. He is packing stuff from his desk into a cardboard box previously used to store reams of paper. He looks sad. Mr. Williams enters carrying a thick, but not cumbersome, stack of files.)
MR. WILLIAMS
Cranston?BOB
Yes, Mr. Williams?MR. WILLIAMS
What are you doing?BOB
Just packing a few things. It’s all my stuff. No office supplies. Except, these binder clips (pulls box of clips from box) Sorry. I wasn’t paying attention.MR. WILLIAMS (not concerned)
Just binder clips, Bob.BOB
Oh, so it’s okay if I…MR. WILLIAMS
No.BOB (putting box of binder clips down on the desk)
Right. Of course. Got to do the right thing here. Leave with a clear conscience.MR. WILLIAMS
Bob, you weren’t laid off.BOB
I wasn’t?MR. WILLIAMS
No. We would have told you.BOB
I thought you just forgot. I didn’t want to make it awkward for you.MR. WILLIAMS
Well, you’re not.BOB
But so many people were. Good people. Digit Dave, in accounting, and he just bought a house. And Peggy, Pregnant Peggy. She’s pregnant. Kidney Ken – Does he know?MR. WILLIAMS
He’ll find out when he comes out of surgery. BOB
And Married Mike –MR. WILLIAMS
Just got married. I know. These are difficult times. That’s why we need people like you, Bob Cranston.BOB
People like me?MR. WILLIAMS
People like you who work really hard and don’t ask for much.BOB
I don’t, do I?MR. WILLIAMS
When was the last time you got a raise?BOB
Three years ago.MR. WILLIAMS
And for how much?BOB
An extra 40 bucks a week. It’s really come in handy.MR. WILLIAMS
$40 a week’s what I spend at Starbucks. It’s only two grand a year.BOB
Wow, when you put it like that, it’s like I’m robbing you.MR. WILLIAMS
Hardly. When was the last time you asked for a raise?BOB
I’ve never asked for a raise.MR. WILLIAMS
What was your Christmas bonus last year and every year since you’ve been here?BOB
A coupon for Crazy Bread from Little Caesar’s and a box of Clementines. I keep the crates the oranges come in and store audiocassettes in them.MR. WILLIAMS
You still listen to audiocassettes?BOB
Right here in my cubicle. (He holds up a large portable cassette player from the cardboard box.) With my headphones on, of course (holds up large headphones).MR. WILLIAMS (plucks a cassette out of the box)
Foreigner. Nice.BOB
I know how to rock, Mr. Williams.MR. WILLIAMS
Bob, with the one raise you received and all that crazy bread, have you ever complained about anything?BOB
No, sir. Never.MR. WILLIAMS
Precisely. That’s my point. The ten people we let go all asked for raises and promotions over the years and got them. They prospered and ambitioned themselves right out of employment. You, Cranston, you have no ambition.BOB
I just want to do a good job.MR. WILLIAMS
Which is good enough for me. I like employees that don’t want much. (Bob starts thinking about this) Now, why don’t you go ahead and unpack that box and get back to work. BOB (sans enthusiasm)
Right away, Mr. Williams.MR. WILLIAMS
Oh, and here’s Pregnant Peggy’s work folders. You’ll need to cover her load.BOB (very matter of fact)
Sure thing, Mr. Williams.(Mr. Williams turns to leave.)
BOB
Mr. Williams? MR. WILLIAMS
Yes, Bob.BOB (avoiding eye contact with Mr. Williams, a little angry)
There is something I want.MR. WILLIAMS
Okay. (pause) What?BOB
I want this box of binder clips. For my home. For my own personal use.MR. WILLIAMS (leaning in)
You go ahead and take home a box of binder clips, big guy. But let’s just keep it between you and me (he slaps Bob on the back).BOB
Thanks, Mr. Williams. You’re the best.MR. WILLIAMS
No, I’m really not.(He exits. Foreigner’s “Cold As Ice” plays as Bob joyfully gets back to work. Blackout)
MY COMMENTS
Well, I notice that I am using actor signals more than I normally would. A signal is where I write in parenthesis after a character's name about how they are saying something, "sans enthusiasm," for example. In a production situation, I hate these. It diminishes the actor's opportunity to discover how the line could best be delivered. And quite often, the writer doesn't have the best take on it. An actor will often find a better more interesting way. However, I'm very aware that you are reading this, probably alone, and to yourself. I think in this case, it acts as a way of painting the picture more for a lone reader. Many screenwriters do this in even more elaborate depth because they know their first hurdle is one person sitting alone in a room, reading.
I started out the day anxious about what I was going to write. I had it in my head that I was going to start with a comic monologue. I was looking for clues for something that would get the wheels turning in my brain. I read a short article about Alexander the Great. Nope. I played an on-line Scrabble game. Nope. Just ended up challenging my brother on using the word "majora" and I won. It is not in the dictionary, foo'. While reading the list of news headlines on The Drudge Report, I had stuck in my head the image of a man packing items up from his desk. Timely, of course. And my billionth contribution to the plethora of office sketches out there. But I couldn't shake it, so I wrote it. The first draft was only two pages, unformatted and I was finished by 10am. The rest of the day, I putzed around, wrote a draft of tomorrow's scene, an extended blackout, and came back from time to time to tweak this scene. A major change was going from "staples" to "binder clips." My sole reason for doing this is because "Bob" was beginning to remind me of "Milton" from Office Space. Staples put him too close to stapler obsession. They are still not-so-distant cousins, but making that one change helped me make other changes, such as the end when Bob asks for what he wants. Silly, but binder clips made the man stronger.
Feel free to leave me questions or feedback in the comments section.
JOSS WHEDON
Joss Whedon did an interview recently where he ran down his top ten writing tips. Worth checking out, regardless of what you think of the Whedonverse. The dude's a crackerjack writer. You can read the article HERE.
SKETCHFEST
Sketchfest is over and I saw some very fine shows. Don Hall and I vow to have a show in there next year. While I saw good stuff, I do need to add an 11 to my post title 10 Things You Should Please Stop Doing In Your Sketch Revue - NOW!!! Number 11 - Stop using an audience member to demonstrate how to pick someone up. I saw it three out of five shows.
MY COMMENTS
Well, I notice that I am using actor signals more than I normally would. A signal is where I write in parenthesis after a character's name about how they are saying something, "sans enthusiasm," for example. In a production situation, I hate these. It diminishes the actor's opportunity to discover how the line could best be delivered. And quite often, the writer doesn't have the best take on it. An actor will often find a better more interesting way. However, I'm very aware that you are reading this, probably alone, and to yourself. I think in this case, it acts as a way of painting the picture more for a lone reader. Many screenwriters do this in even more elaborate depth because they know their first hurdle is one person sitting alone in a room, reading.
I started out the day anxious about what I was going to write. I had it in my head that I was going to start with a comic monologue. I was looking for clues for something that would get the wheels turning in my brain. I read a short article about Alexander the Great. Nope. I played an on-line Scrabble game. Nope. Just ended up challenging my brother on using the word "majora" and I won. It is not in the dictionary, foo'. While reading the list of news headlines on The Drudge Report, I had stuck in my head the image of a man packing items up from his desk. Timely, of course. And my billionth contribution to the plethora of office sketches out there. But I couldn't shake it, so I wrote it. The first draft was only two pages, unformatted and I was finished by 10am. The rest of the day, I putzed around, wrote a draft of tomorrow's scene, an extended blackout, and came back from time to time to tweak this scene. A major change was going from "staples" to "binder clips." My sole reason for doing this is because "Bob" was beginning to remind me of "Milton" from Office Space. Staples put him too close to stapler obsession. They are still not-so-distant cousins, but making that one change helped me make other changes, such as the end when Bob asks for what he wants. Silly, but binder clips made the man stronger.
Feel free to leave me questions or feedback in the comments section.
JOSS WHEDON
Joss Whedon did an interview recently where he ran down his top ten writing tips. Worth checking out, regardless of what you think of the Whedonverse. The dude's a crackerjack writer. You can read the article HERE.
SKETCHFEST
Sketchfest is over and I saw some very fine shows. Don Hall and I vow to have a show in there next year. While I saw good stuff, I do need to add an 11 to my post title 10 Things You Should Please Stop Doing In Your Sketch Revue - NOW!!! Number 11 - Stop using an audience member to demonstrate how to pick someone up. I saw it three out of five shows.
